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                After completing this short week of English, I realized I have a lot to work on. The thesis practice in class was very refreshing because even though I may think I am confident with writing theses, I always learn new ways and strategies to prove that I still need some practice. I enjoyed collaborating with classmates to analyze our thesis statements to ensure we included both a specific or personal part, and the meaning attached to that. From this, we determined that I had both of these elements, but I need to find a way to express the word choice differently to fully get my point across and make it a strong thesis.

                Furthermore, there was much clarification on how to organize this essay which is also something that needs a lot of tweaking in my essay. In my first run through of the draft, I put the events in chronological order and included analysis at the end, but after class I recognized that I wanted to try and switch up the paragraphs to start from the now and flashback to the then. This will give my essay more shape and keep it interesting. I really want to also try and use the song as a conclusion or introductory strategy because I find it to be an abstract way to describe events in our lives. Music has always been a big part of my life and I find songs say the words I can’t seem to fit together. Aware that this essay will require a lot of change, I am ready to tackle and make a piece that will be worth reading.